Oots commented at 2023-02-02 02:39:24 » #2780698

This looks really good so far. However, there are some changes you can make.

For Yuki, it looks like she has a very big head due to the hair, especially her left side where Jody's hand is. You might wanna redraw that section as her tail is actually a lot nearer to Jody's hand. As for her right side, where Jody's left hand is usually, the top part looks flat and maybe a bit bigger than it's supposed to be. I understand that you had to fill in that section because of the absence of Jody's hand but it looks a bit too... "fluffy"? "Thicker"? In summary, let's make Yuki's hair more compact so that it fits her head size. Right now, it looks like she has a square head instead of the usual round/oval shape.

For Yuki's arm, I think you can afford to make her forearm shorter and place it nearer to Jody's crotch, like in the reference image. Here, it looks like her arm is slightly out of proportion. I think the same goes for Jody's left arm. It seems like her upper arm is longer than it should be, so you might wanna readjust the length and placement of her elbow.

Nevertheless, you've done a really good job! I like how you drew Jody's left hand lifting her own skirt instead of putting it on Yuki's head. I think it's really sexy :) Sorry for the detailed feedback but I hope you can take it into account. Keep it up!

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